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Create Impact Now: 4 Key Appeal Ingredients That Move Donors to Act

Let’s say you’ve done everything thus far suggested in this fundraising appeal checklist.

✅ You’ve done the groundwork.
✅ You’ve focused your message.
✅ You’ve made it about the donor—not your organization.

Now it’s time to bring it home.

Because no matter how clear or well-structured your appeal is, it won’t inspire action unless it moves the reader.

Emotion—not logic—is what compels people to give. And that emotion is sparked by how you make your donor feel.

Do they feel seen? Valued? Needed? Inspired? Uplifted?

Transform Your Appeal from a Simple Ask into a Powerful Invitation

The final four steps of this 8-step checklist are about speaking to your donor’s best self, inspiring compassion, and stirring urgency.

These are the emotional ingredients that turn intention into action.

Let’s explore them.

In Part 1 we looked at the first four:

1. 1. You
   2. Easy
   3. Welcome
   4. Heart-awakening

Today we continue with four more.

1. 5. Best Self
   6. Uplift
   7. Unconditional Love
   8. Urgency

5. BEST SELF

What if part of the reason our sector has so little understanding of our supporters is because we think we’ve done the work of understanding by slapping the activist, volunteer, donor (insert other generic label here) on people?

— Kevin Shulman, Founder, DonorVoice

Donors have their own sense of identity; they’re people first.

Trying to categorize them neatly into donor “personas” (e.g., “Wanda Widow,” “Busby Business Man,” “Suzy Soccer Mom,)” doesn’t work nearly as well as helping them express their best self or selves.

Fundraising Appeal Checklist: 8 Essentials to Review Before You Write

Before you write a single word of your annual fundraising appeal, pause.

Take a deep breath.

And think about the person who will open your letter or email.

They’re not just a “donor.” They’re a person with hopes, fears, dreams and values.

• Someone who cares.
• Someone who wants to make a difference.
• Someone who, in a world full of distractions, is about to give you their attention—and maybe even their trust.

When you think in this broader context, it’s clear your appeal is more than a request for money. It’s a chance to build a bridge between your donor’s values and yours. To spark hope. To remind someone of the good they can do—through you.

This Checklist Will Help You Avoid Common Missteps

Too often, well-meaning appeals are ignored—not because the cause isn’t worthy, but because the message misses the mark. Maybe it’s too vague. Too organizationally focused. Or simply doesn’t make the donor feel like they matter.

That’s where this 8-step self-test comes in.

These first four steps are designed to help you lay a strong foundation before you write. They’ll keep your message clear, focused, and deeply donor-centered—so your appeal doesn’t just get read, but truly felt.

Let’s dive in.

We’ll review the final 4 steps in Part 2.

1. YOU

“The most beautiful thing in the world is you.”

— Alvin Ailey, choreographer and dancer, (1931-1989)

This gets to who you’re writing to.

Not to yourself, program staff. or your board of directors. You’re writing to ONE donor. It’s about their ego, not yours. Their needs, not yours.

Take a good hard look at your letter. How often do you use “I,” “my,” “our,” “we,” or the name of your organization vs. “you” and “your?”

Fix this! Here’s a “you test” you can use from Bloomerang.

Here’s a “don’t” example:

These Fundraising Appeal Fallacies Will Cost You Money

Ever have a well-meaning, yet perhaps overly controlling or risk-aversive, boss say to you:

• Our fundraising letter must be no longer than one page.

• That’s too simple; we don’t want to talk down to our donors.

• We need to say more about our accomplishments.

• We need to describe numbers of people served; that’s what’s impressive.

• That’s not how I talk.

• That’s not our corporate style.

• That’s not how we do things.

• That’s not what our donors are used to.

• That’s not proper grammar.

• That’s too gushy and effusive.

• I want happy, not sad, photos.

• Asking the reader to “please give generously” is sufficient; no need to name an amount.

• Asking once is enough.

• The development director should sign the letter.

• Signatures from both the E.D. and board president will be more persuasive.

• We don’t need a P.S.

Alas, these are common fundraising appeal fallacies that will cost you money. Money donors might have given to you, if you’d only understood some fundamental fundraising truths.

Truths, Not Fallacies

I was reminded of some of these truths in a post from Jeff Brooks. He spoke of true pearls of wisdom gleaned from his fundraising mentor, the pioneering direct mail writer Bob Screen. We’ve lost Bob and several fundraising giants in recent years, including Simone Joyaux and John Haydon, but we should never lose sight of the wisdom they imparted. It’s the best way to assure their memories live on and their good works continue.

I did not know Bob, but I’m sure I learned from him without realizing it.  Because the good stuff gets passed around. Why?  Because it works.

And it takes someone with experience to not just demonstrate it works, but to forcefully maintain the necessity of adhering to tested principles, facts and truth.  Even – especially – in the face of doubters (e.g. executive directors; board presidents) who would seriously derail your fundraising efforts. With all good intention, of course.

YOU are the fundraiser.

Never forget this is why you were hired. No one is an expert at everything. And chances are fundraising writing is not your leadership’s key area of proficiency. It’s your job to know what works, and what doesn’t.